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A cup of coffee, a faked smile,
Another sleepless night.
Forget the sorrow; pretend you're fine;
In the end you'll be alright.

And then the memories suddenly rise,
And then emotions are running high,
And all you want to do is –
Stop, you've got to fake a smile.

You walk along the roads alone.
The mask must never, ever, fall.
At times you wish to let it go,
But then you can't, and this is all

About to slip beyond control,
About to shatter you to pieces
You still don't let yourself to cry
Though tears are in your list of wishes

Facing the world a minute by minute,
Knowing your life is an act.
A cup of coffee, a faked smile,
Another sleepless night.
For the contest of :iconwriting-to-live:
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Edit: I won the second place, and am quite excited about it. :aww:
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Whitetiger807 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is written beautifully. Very sad, but absolutely lovely. It flows very well. Congratulations on winning second in the contest!
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
Thank you very much.
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Whitetiger807 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure.
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aire73 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist
It's so beautifully true, you made me smile. :)
Congrats, too, auntie! <3
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
I hope it was a real smile...
Thank you, dearie! <3
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aire73 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist
I realized how ironic my comment was once I'd posted it. XD You can be sure it was a perfectly real smile, auntie. :) You're welcome!
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
I'm glad, then. :)
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I go through that... T_T
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
:hug:
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconthankyouplz:
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CarynBrokaw Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Love it! It is so true. Everyone wants to let go of their mask, but it won't unless everyone else does too, so assuming no one else does, we stick to what is "safe."

Unfortunately :/

Beautiful, beautiful. Loved the hyphen and the "stop". The reader really feels the interruption there, almost as if it occurred in their own minds!
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thank you very much (for the fav, too)!

It could have been a better world, had people had few masks. Unfortunately, we have to go on with reality.

I'm glad you feel so, this is what I wanted the reader to feel.
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i-am-a-retro-lass Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
beautifully written. i love it.
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
Thank you very much.
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SmilingOfTheHealer Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
And it is well deserved second place! I really like it! Well done, dear! :huggle::tighthug::hug:
Somewhere inside, I wished I could write like you... But in poetry, I'm a dummy, it seems :dummy:
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012
Thank you very much!
I admire your drawing and painting skills. =)
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Glorrosaelin Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh, wow. D: That was so sad! You really have a gift for making your writing convey emotion, especially in this bit of poetry. You should do it more often. :heart:
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ninquetari Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
Thank you.
It's not easy, and is usually mood influenced, but I do like this way.
:hug:
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AndrogynousRabbit Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can relate
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ninquetari Featured By Owner May 5, 2012
I think we all feel so at times.
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AndrogynousRabbit Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
-n0d n0d- agreed
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MiniBaa209 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This...is...so sad. :iconsadfaceplz:
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012
Yea... But sometimes I feel it's the truth. =O=

Thanks for the fav!
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MiniBaa209 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yes, it is. And yet everybody're trying to deny it to no end. :(
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012
I don't think everyoe does, but many do...
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MiniBaa209 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Yeah... :worry:
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